Improving Blog Comments

Kia Ora Everyone, Today in Cybersmart we went onto someone's blog found a comment and gave it a makeover. I went onto Dani's blog and improved Hunter's comment which said "Hi Dani i lick this slid. Dani you cod ad a titoll. Rpliy"


My improved version says "Hi Dani, My name it Hunter I am from Titirangi School. I really liked your slideshow, even though I don’t really like KFC but I do like pizza. I reminded me of when I did animations last year as a Year 3. Next time you could improve your spelling. What it your favourite type of pizza at Pizza Hut? From Hunter, Blog you later Please Reply"

In my improved version I made it follow the correct structure, Positive, Thoughtful, Helpful. I also made sure it had lots of detail.

I hope you enjoyed my blog post. Blog you later!